The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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of tourists to England who attended four different events in Brighton.
Overall
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,it can be seen that
three
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the three
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graphs decreased except
festival
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for festival
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events. Festivals and
Pavilions
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were the most visited attractions in 1980.They began at a fairly similar level of between 23% and 30% in 1985,but
while
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the
Pavilions
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increased dramatically during 10 years and peaked
almost
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at almost
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50%,visiting festivals decreased steadily.
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,for
next
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the next
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5
years
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years,
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Pavilions
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plunged to 35%,and
then
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got
stable
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decrease to 31% in 2010.
Pavilions
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increased gradually to 28% in 2000,and for
next
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the next
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10 years
was
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were
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without changes.
Art
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gallery
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and
Pier
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graphs were the most unpopular events.At began
Art
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Gallery
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dramatically increased and peaked
almost
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at almost
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40%,
while
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Pier
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steadily rose to 15%.In 1985 both graphs decreased,
while
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Art
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the Art
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Gallery
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dramatically dropped,
Pier
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dropped steadily,and
then
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in 1990 they
got
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had
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very similar fluctuations till 2000.From 2000 to 2010
Pier
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rose to 22% and peaked
the
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at the
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hight
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height
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,
while
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Art
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Gallery
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fell to 8% and became most unpopular.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words pavilions, art, gallery, pier with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
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