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The line graph below shows the percentage of spending in a European country from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of spending in a European country from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph examines the information about the
expanses
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expenses
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 which
was
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were
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 spent on different aspects in a European country from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
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, what can be seen from the chart is that European
country
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countries
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expanding
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 in all the given
expanses
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expenses
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 decreased to varying extents, except for clothing, which experienced a slight growth over the period. As the graphs
shows
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show
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, the
figure
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of
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for
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 food started at 35% in 1960 followed by a small decrease to 30% in 1970.
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 the
trend
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 declined rapidly to just under 15% in 2000. Regarding leisure expanse, in 1960 they shipped 20%.
This
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figure
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also
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 experienced a quick fall to about 12% in 2000. If we look at clothing, in 1960 the spending on transport
compiled
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amounted to
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 10%, but
then
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this
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trend
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 plummeted steadily until it fell to just under 8% in 1990.
Afterward
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, the
figure
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 continued to
fell
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fall
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when
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and
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 plunged to below 5% over the year.
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, clothing was approximately 10% in the year 1960.
The
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this
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trend
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 experienced a gradual increase to just over 15% in 1980 reaching
to
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apply
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about 17% in 2000. Regarding transport, it was the smallest
figure
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 accounting
a
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for a
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little more than 5% in 1960.
Then
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 the
trend
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 showed downward over time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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