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The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and by night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and by night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts above
describes
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 the four types of
noise
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 that face
people
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 during the
day
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 or and
night
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 in cities and rural areas, the four types
is
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are
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Traffic
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, Train, Aircraft,
Industry
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. Starting with cities,
Traffic
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noise
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have
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 the highest number of
people
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 that
had
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 been affected with 64
milliona
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million
 in the
day
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 and 48
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millions
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million
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 at
the
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apply
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night
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.
Industry
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noise
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 is the lowest
amoung
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among
 the other four with 1 million
individual
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individuals
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complening
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complaining
 during the
day
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 and 0.25 million at
night
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.
Moreover
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, rural areas
is
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are
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 the same as
citise
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cities
 with
highest
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the highest
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 noising type and it was
Traffic
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 but with
less
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fewer
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people
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 affected, about 34
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millions
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million
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 in the morning and 24
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millions
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million
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at the end
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 of the
day
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, with zero
complaing
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complaining
complaints
 from
Industry
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noise
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.
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Nevertheless
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 few are having some
noise
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 from Aircraft 2
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millions
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million
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duraing
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during
 the
day
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 and 1 million at
night
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.
To sum up
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, the main
factore
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factor
factors
 that most
people
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having
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have
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noise
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 from it is the
Traffic
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, and the lowest one
on
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in
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 both cities and rural areas is
Industry
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, people, day, night, traffic, industry, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affected
  • traffic noise
  • industrial noise
  • construction noise
  • social events noise
  • urban areas
  • rural areas
  • day and night
  • significant increase
  • notable decrease
  • disturbance levels
  • comparatively high
  • disparity
  • proportion affected
  • peak times
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