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The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and by night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and by night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate how many people
are
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were
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 affected by
noise
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 in the morning and at
nigh
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night
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 in Europe in 2007. They
inclueded
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included
include
 a comparison of cities and rural
areas
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areas'
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noise
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with noise
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 of Traffic,
Train
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Trains
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, Aircraft, and
Indurtrial
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industrial
. Units are measured in millions.
Overall
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, it is clear from both charts that the number of individuals in
citites
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cities
 are more affected by the
noise
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 of all four
type
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types
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,
while
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 rural areas show
a lower numbers
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a lower number
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 of impacted individuals.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, both charts show that Traffic
noise
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 had the highest impact,
while
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 Industrial
noise
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 was almost
negligable
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negligible
 for people.
To begin
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 with,
theTraffic
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the traffic
noise
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 in cities showed the highest figures in
day
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the day
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 and at night with 64
million
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 and 48
million
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 people affected, respectively.
On the other hand
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,
rural
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in rural
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 areas Traffic
noise
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 ranked next with 34
million
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 and 24
million
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 impacted
human
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humans
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 respectively.  For

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affected
  • traffic noise
  • industrial noise
  • construction noise
  • social events noise
  • urban areas
  • rural areas
  • day and night
  • significant increase
  • notable decrease
  • disturbance levels
  • comparatively high
  • disparity
  • proportion affected
  • peak times
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