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Band 4.5

You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear
sir
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/Madam. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest
to
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in
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become
Verb problem
being
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 membership
in
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of
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 your gym as my
recidence
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residence
 is just walking distance from your location and I
wanted
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want
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 to start gym
activites
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activities
 in
short
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a short
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 time as per my health advisor.
Initially
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, I need to know the offers available for new enrolments as
wll
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well
 as
payment
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the payment
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 procedure and
the
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whether the
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 duration is
that
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apply
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hourly/monthly/
weekely
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weekly
 or yearly, that will
helps
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help
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 me to make my arrangements.
secondly
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, could you please share the
activites
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activities
 details which are covered in the package
.
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 Significantly I
want
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won't
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put
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to put
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 down my weight
therefore
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 I would like to do workouts like
threadmill
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treadmill
,
benchpress
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bench press
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, weight lift and
abdoman
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abdomen
abdominal
 crunch.
Finally
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, I need the best coach to train me as am new to
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this
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these
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 gym
activites
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activities
.
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, what
are
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is
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 the
process
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processes
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 that
need
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needs
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 to do for my admission, I have
national
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a national
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 identity card with
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a recidential
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recidential
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residential
 proof
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of ecectricity
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ecectricity
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electricity
 bill hope these 2 documents are enough to do
joining
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the joining
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 process. yours faithfully.
ananth
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Ananth
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that paragraphs each contain a single main idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Consider refining your language and grammar for formality and accuracy.
task achievement
Your letter includes relevant questions regarding membership and activities.
task achievement
The tone is friendly and shows eagerness to join the gym.
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