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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were abale to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were abale to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The two pie charts illustrate the proportions of British
students
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 at one university in England who had the ability to speak more than one
language
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besides
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 English in two different years (2000-2010).
Overall
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, the most commonly spoken
language
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 among the British
students
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 was Spanish in both years.
On the other hand
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, German was the least spoken
language
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 in 2000.
Likewise
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, in 2010, there were three languages that were the least spoken, which were German, French, and no other
language
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. With regard to the proportions of Spanish-speaking
students
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, they accounted for less than a third in 2000 and
then
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 increased to over one-third.
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, two other languages accounted for one in ten, which later rose to less than a fifth in 2010. The same situation applies to another
language
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, which was 15% before rising to a fifth. In terms of French, the number of
students
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 accounted for 15%, but
then
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 decreased to 10% in 2010. The German
language
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 remained constant, comprising 10% in both years.

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