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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage contribution of three sectors—
agriculture
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,
industry
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, and
services
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—to India’s GDP between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
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, there was a significant decline in
agriculture
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’s share,
while
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 the
services
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sector
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 expanded considerably, making it the dominant contributor by 2000. In 1960,
agriculture
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 was the largest
sector
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, accounting for approximately 62% of GDP.
In contrast
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,
industry
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 and
services
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 contributed much smaller proportions, around 15% and 20%, respectively. Over the next two decades,
agriculture
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’s share declined steadily, falling to about 52% in 1970 and
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 to 45% by 1980. Meanwhile, the
industry
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 and
services
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 sectors experienced gradual growth, with
services
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 surpassing 30% in 1980. By 1990, the
services
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sector
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 overtook
agriculture
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, becoming the largest contributor at roughly 40%.
Agriculture
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 and
industry
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 were nearly equal at around 30% each.
This
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 shift continued into 2000
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 when
services
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 reached nearly 65%,
agriculture
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 dropped below 20%, and
industry
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 remained relatively stable at approximately 25%. In summary, India's economic structure transformed significantly over the four decades, shifting from an
agriculture
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-dominated economy in 1960 to a
services
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-driven one by 2000. The
industry
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sector
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 saw moderate growth, but its role remained secondary to
services
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, services, sector, agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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