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The pie charts below show the percentage of household expenditure on different categories in a particular country in 1990 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.”

The pie charts below show the percentage of household expenditure on different categories in a particular country in 1990 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.”
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of household expenditure in a specific country from 1990 to 2020.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
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food
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the food
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 category was the highest spending.
While
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,
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 entertainment
activities
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 were the least expenditure in both years. In 1990, 25% - 34% the the
people
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 consumed
food
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 and housing facilities. In 1990, 25% - 34% the the
people
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 consumed
food
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 and housing facilities.
However
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, similar
percentage
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on
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of
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 spending
transportation
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on transportation
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 and other
activities
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.
Also
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, Only 10%
the
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of the
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 proportion of
people
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 who practiced entertainment
activities
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.
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, in 2020, there
were
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 a significant
percentage
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 of household expenditure. It reached to 40%.
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, a gradual
percentage
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 on consumed the
food
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.
In addition
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, transport services were used by only 20%.
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, there
were
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was
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 a low
percentage
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 of
the
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apply
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people
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 who participated
entertainment
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in entertainment
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activities
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in contrast".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, activities, people, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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