Fossil fuels such as coal, oil and natural gas are the main source of many countries. However some nations are using alternative energy such as wind power and solar power. Do you think this is a positive or negative trend?

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been bliss for centuries. Many
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around the world depend on fossil
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fuel
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like coal, oil,
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natural gas
while
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others have found using both
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and solar power more sustainable. In
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the
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and positive
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economic
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environment
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conditions.
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many
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are abundantly rich in fossil
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, it is not sufficient
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around the
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. These
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are expensive and highly in demand.
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import them for various purposes from other
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.
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, petrol and diesel are exported
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countries
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despite
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the high cost, which can affect
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countries
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economy
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if the demand rises. People
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end up paying high taxes on
such
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resources
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. So, it is essential to utilise more
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renewable
resources
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such
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as
wind
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and solar energy.
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use
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wind
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turbine
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turbines
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to generate their own energy
to
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use
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;
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use
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solar panels for basic household
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. Using renewable sources
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more economical, in today's world where every
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is
extermely
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extremely
expensive.
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, using renewable
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is
eco friendly
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. It is
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innovative
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to not only consume it regularly but
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sustainable
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in nature. Fossil
fuel
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produces smoke and pollutes
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.
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, a solar panel installed on the roof doesn't create any carbon
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whereas
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petrol or diesel used by generators or
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emits carbon.
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, it is important for us to contribute positively towards the betterment of our
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and
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eco friendly
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and renewable power. In conclusion, I believe that we should continue to approach new and innovative ideas to
use
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natural
recources
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resources
such
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as water,
wind
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and sun energy to live
a sustainable lives
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a sustainable life
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. It is not only
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budget
friendly but
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a step toward progressive and sustainable development of the country by all means. Importing
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resources
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will be less required and people will pay lower taxes. Earth will heal its ozone layer as
atmosphere
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will be
pollution free
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. So, it is better to incline toward renewable power and reduce
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use
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fossil
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fuel
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.

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task achievement
Consider refining your thesis statement in the introduction to clearly outline your argument and the points you will discuss. This helps set up the reader's expectations.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea supported by relevant arguments and examples. Some points could be developed further for clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Work on your grammar and vocabulary to enhance the clarity of your sentences. This includes correcting minor errors and improving word choice.
task achievement
You have provided a thoughtful analysis of the advantages of renewable energy, addressing environmental and economic aspects.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • alternative energy
  • renewable sources
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable energy
  • climate change
  • job opportunities
  • energy security
  • technological innovations
  • government policies
  • air pollution
  • economic growth
  • depletion of resources
  • investment in renewables
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