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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the percentage of British people
given
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 money to charity by age range for the
years
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 1990 and 2010. The bar chart shows that in 1990 those who had between 36-
50
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and 50
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 were the ones that donated the
moste
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most
, and in 2010 were those who had between 51-
65
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and 65
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.
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, in both
years
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 British people who
had
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 between 18-
25
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and 25
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 were the ones that gave less money to charity.
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, we can see that over the
years
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 almost every cluster decreased
on
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 its percentage, the 18-25 age group decreased by 10% in twenty
years
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, the one between 26-35 by 15% and the 36-50 decreased by 10%.
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, the clusters between 51-65 and 65 increased
on
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 its percentage by 5% and 4%. After taking all the details, we can conclude that young British people used to donate less than the older ones.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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