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Some people think that climate change reforms will negatively affect businesses. Others feel that they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Few people
argues
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 that
climate
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 change can have a negative effect on business but others believe it
as
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is
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 an
opportunity
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 for businesses. In my
opinion
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 it can have several
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opportunity
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to
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businessess
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business
.
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 essay will discuss both
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these
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 views and will state several arguments supporting my opinion. The debate
surronding
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surrounding
 whether
climate
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 change is affecting business all over the world is a
cruical
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crucial
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asked
. As GDP rates
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everyday
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and
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the reason remains obvious.
With heavy
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climate
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 changes
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 as flooding, droughts and extreme high weather reported recently in
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 countries.
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 will affect those multinational companies in a very negative way leading them to less profit per year.
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, India
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 several international company franchises but
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 its weather changing
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 as floods and
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reported
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 in every state during monsoon and winter.The
comapany
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company
remain
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 unprofited with several lost sales reported.
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, it can be an
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 for
businessess
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businesses
 to make good
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 and sales during the harsh
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 atmosphere.
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, adapting
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 renewable
energy
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 can make them
to
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contribute more to green and sustainable
energy
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.
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, using
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energy efficient
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 technologies and waste reduction methods will attract more customers
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, gaining customer
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loyalty
 and good sales.
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, many international companies
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 adopted to green and sustainable
energy
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guide
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 to their product and
marketting stratergies
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marketing strategies
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result
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 people gain more interest
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 these brands and trust those companies more than the other.
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, In my
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climate
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 change can bring many
positve
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positive
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 to
business
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businesses
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such
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 as
adapating
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adapting
 to green and sustainable
energy
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,
gaining
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and gaining
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 more consumer interest and trust than a negative effect.

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language
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coherence
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task achievement
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task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic, signaling your stance effectively.
task achievement
You have attempted to address both sides of the argument, which is important for task fulfillment.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change reforms
  • operational costs
  • emissions caps
  • compliance standards
  • cleaner technologies
  • small and medium enterprises (SMEs)
  • job losses
  • sustainability
  • green technology
  • renewable energy solutions
  • eco-friendly products
  • competitive edge
  • environmentally conscious consumers
  • corporate responsibility
  • stakeholders
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