The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the inform ation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the inform ation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the inform ation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of males and females at the age of 60 to 64 who worked in
Belgium
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, the USA, Japan, and Australia between 1970 and 2000.
It is clear that
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the percentages of working men were significantly higher in these nations.
Overall
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, the number of male workers decreased significantly,
whereas
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among
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females, it was not so. Notably, by far the most drastic drop was seen in
Belgium
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. Focusing first on
Belgium
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and Australia, in 1970, approximately 80% of men in each of these areas aged 60 to 64 were employed,
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for
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women, the corresponding figures were 8 and 16 per cent, respectively, which remained relatively constant by the end of the period. After 30 years, the proportion of working males in
Belgium
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dropped by 60%,
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in Australia, the final figure was 50%. As for Japan and America, in 1970, the levels of employment among men there were nearly 85% and 75%, which was almost twice as much as the corresponding figures
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women. By 2000, the proportions of workers in the first group decreased by 10 and 30 per cent, as opposed to almost unchanged percentages for females.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words belgium with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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