The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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This
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bar illustrates the amount of
fruits
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and
vegetable
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vegetables
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have
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that have
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been ingested by men, women and children between the years 2001 to 2008.
Overall
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, by looking
to
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at
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the chart it's clear that women are the most consuming between men and children.
While
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men appear to be the lowest all over
this
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period.
Firstly
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, females
are eating
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eat
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fruits
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and
vegetable
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vegetables
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by 22% in
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year
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the year
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of
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apply
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2001.
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Additionally
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the percentage kept to be
raising
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rising
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constantly to 30% in
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year
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the year
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of
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apply
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2005
untill
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until
reached
the
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a
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peak in
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year
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the year
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of
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2006 up to 35%.
While
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between 2007 to 2008 represented a mild drop down to 30%.
Secondly
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, it's observed that consuming
the
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apply
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fruits
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is less than women.
Moreover
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, the percentage of having
fruits
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portion is increasing gradually
started
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starting
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by 12% in 2001
untill
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until
2006 reached to 28%.
Furthermore
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,
remain
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remained
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steady before it
droped
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dropped
to 22% by
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year
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the year
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of
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apply
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2008.
Finally
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, kids showed
constant
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the constant
a constant
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amount of
having
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apply
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vegetables in the first three years.
Then
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increased constantly
untill
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until
reach
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reached
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the surge
by
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26% in 2007 before going down again to 24% in 2008.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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