You and your family have just come back from a holiday staying in a rented accommodation overlooking the sea. The apartment was very unsatisfactory. Write a letter of complaint to the manager of the agency from which you rented the apartment. In your letter: give details of the things that were unsatisfactory explain the reactions of the members of your family ask the manager what he/she is going to do about the situation.

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing a letter to express my frustration towards rented living quarters and complaint to the manager of the agency who rented the apartment. Recently, I visited the sea for a holiday
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with my family to enjoy the vacation, but
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unsatisfaction
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the management. Let me explain my situation, We stayed in
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apartment called Crescent
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which outlook has
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stunning infrastructure where
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inside the building it was untidy typically inside the washroom as well balcony,
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which is highly vital for family members.
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with full of dust
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it is not unto the mark
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we expect.
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not working to take
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morning shower
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disappointment to all,
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, Family
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reactions
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hell, they were extremely upset and disheartened about the service furnished by
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. I would appreciate it if you could provide better service in the upcoming days. Kindly explain to me what kind of implantation for
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betterment of
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apartment, your management will do
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I look forward to your prompt response and a swift resolution to
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issue. Yours faithfully, Latha Nagaraju.

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task achievement
Ensure that the introduction clearly states the purpose of the letter, which is to complain about the rented accommodation.
coherence and cohesion
Try to provide specific examples in a separate paragraph for clarity, which will help with the logical structure of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity of sentences and avoid overly complex wording; simpler language can often communicate your point more effectively.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite and formal tone, which is appropriate for a complaint letter.
complete response
You identified key issues regarding cleanliness and facilities, which is essential in a complaint letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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