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1. Some companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniforms. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniform?

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As business requirements evolve in the contemporary world, some authorities implement similar dress codes for their employees at workplaces. In
this
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 essay. I will explicate what I consider to be the possible advantages to
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 the staff to wear uniforms,
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 the demerits that
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 to occur. In terms of the benefits
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 the specific attires for
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 at certain organisations, there are two clear ones. The first one is improvement in team building and unity among workers that can arise during task performance. As members of
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work
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 together at the stations, dressed in the same clothing
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, it mitigates foreseen differences
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 as personal
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,
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 backgrounds. Ultimately, there is a possibility of bond enhancement as all team members feel unified. An additional benefit of employees wearing alike
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 is that it can save fruitful resources
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 as time and money. During the hectic
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 schedules, rather than focusing on choosing and purchasing the new outfits
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 the workers can prioritize other important
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. By
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, they can allocate their time
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 prioritised
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 chores as well not much expense to buy appropriate
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clothes
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.
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, implementing mandatory uniforms at workplaces may present some challenges. One reason is that it can diminish
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self- confidence
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 and individual personality. It is undeniable that every employee has unique personal characteristics; in
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 they
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 to dress up in
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styles
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 in order to reflect personal expression.
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,
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 can build up their independent productivity level
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work places
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workplaces
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. Another issue can be the rise of uncomfortable levels for employees that can come from inappropriate clothing
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 in certain working conditions. For
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,
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 uniform stitched in
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 fabric can make the labourer extensively sweat
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 demanding
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, as the energy drains
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 they feel uncomfortable to perform the job
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 productively. In conclusion,
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the rule to wear alike
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workplace
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the workplace
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 areas
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 a tremendous advantage in creating effective and strong
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 among co-workers
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 cutting costs and time for them.
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, the uniforms should be designed by companies
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 the individual personality and comfort levels they attain
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 wearing these
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.

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Task Achievement
Ensure you have a clear thesis statement in your introduction outlining both the advantages and disadvantages. This helps guide the reader through your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to make your concluding sentence stronger by emphasizing the balance between the pros and cons discussed.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to use varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance readability and demonstrate a higher level of English.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is essential for coherence.
Task Achievement
You successfully identified and discussed relevant advantages and disadvantages related to the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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