The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range For the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range For the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range For the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the percentage of Canadians who donated money to charity in different
age
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groups between 2000 and 2015.
Overall
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, the proportion of
middle
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middle-aged
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age
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donors contributed more than any other
age
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group given in the chart
eventhough
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even though
the proportion varies slightly over the period of fifteen years. By taking a closer look, people belonging to the
age
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range 35 to 49 years and 50 to 64 years donated more than any other
age
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range in both 2000 and 2015.
On
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In
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the year 2000,
middle
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middle-aged
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age
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individuals
was
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were
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the majority of almost 40% in terms of donors
while
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on
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in
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the year 2015,
old
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old-aged
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age
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individuals
take
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took
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the lead by almost 38%.
Furthermore
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, the
overall
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percentage of donors was
more
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higher
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in 2000 than in 2015. By probing
further
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, we can say that younger individuals are less generous as people from 18 to 24 only contributed 20% in 2000 and an even lower of 10% in 2015 so they are a minority.
On the other hand
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, older
goups
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groups
consist of a larger proportion and donate more than 60% of all
donor
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donors
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on the chart.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age range
  • charitable organisations
  • fluctuates
  • notable changes
  • participation
  • considerable decrease
  • contrast
  • consistent increase
  • middle age groups
  • peak
  • notable drop
  • shift
  • financial priorities
  • economic circumstances
  • demographic
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