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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category - 2002

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category - 2002
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 different nations' consumer spending on
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 different items in 2002. To analyse
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 table, we begin by taking a closer look at the data presented and it is
obviously
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 that
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 countries people spent the most money on food, drink and tobacco; meanwhile, leisure and education fees occupied the least. As
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 category of food, drink and tobacco, Turkey cost 32.14% which was the highest rate among
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five
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 countries,
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 second highest was Ireland, Irish spent 28.91% in 2002. In terms of clothing and footwear, Italy
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 9%
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 sphere, more than another four nations, approximately
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5 to 6% on clothing and footwear. As for leisure and education, all countries tended to put the lowest budget
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 higher than 5%, it is readily apparent that Turkey spent the most
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five
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 nations,
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 Italy and Sweden both cost roughly 3.2%, the
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 one is Spain, spent 1.98% in the given year.

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