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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 is possible to observe how the subscriptions to mobile and fixed telephones have changed from 2005 to 2015 in
Eritrea
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,
India
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, the
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 and
Uruguay
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.
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mobile phones follow two different patterns, with
Uruguay
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 and
India
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 experiencing an increase, and the
UK
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 and Entrea remaining stable throughout the whole period. Meanwhile, for fixed phones, all countries act in the same manner, remaining stable for the whole period. In 2005, the
UK
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 had the most phone subscriptions, 100 out of 100 people; next to it, there was
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, under 50
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 there were
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 and
Eritrea
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 without subscriptions. Since
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, the trend in
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 and
India
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 has increased, making the first one the nation with the highest amount of subscribers in 2015. Meanwhile, for the fixed phone lines, the situation has remained the same since 2005, with
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 in the first place with 60
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 in second place
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 30
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;
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, the trend in the first country slightly decreased in 2013, where it combined with
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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