In some countries, small town-center shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of town stores, and it may result in an increase in the use of cars. Do you think the disadvantages of this change outweigh its advantages?

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a trend that small shops are declining
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business because people prefer to
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large malls. The negative
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masses use the cars for
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the wealth of the person. I personally believe
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coherence and cohesion
Try to provide clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance logical flow and cohesion throughout the essay.
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Ensure that each argument is thoroughly supported with relevant examples and explanations to strengthen your overall response.
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Develop a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your position on the topic.
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The essay presents a clear opinion that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages, which is a strong starting point.
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Your introduction effectively introduces the topic of small shops declining in business.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • out-of-town stores
  • small town-center shops
  • business decline
  • consumer preference
  • local economy
  • community engagement
  • car dependency
  • public transport accessibility
  • environmental concerns
  • carbon emissions
  • traffic congestion
  • personalized service
  • cultural impact
  • convenience
  • competitive prices
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