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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The current bar chart compares the export earnings of five different
goods
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 in one country in 2015 and 2016.
Additionally
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, the table demonstrates how much each one has changed in
value
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 during these two years.
Overall
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, the two most valuable exports were simultaneously petroleum
products
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 and engineered
goods
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 in both 2015 and 2016.
In contrast
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, textiles were the least valuable ones in these years. Regarding the table, all the
products
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 showed an increasing trend in
value
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 except for the gems and jewellery. Based on the chart, in 2015, petroleum
products
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 earned 60
billion
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dollars
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 making them the most valuable export product and engineered
goods
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 and gems and jewellery were the second and third most valuable exports, respectively, generating 55 and 42
billion
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dollars
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 in earnings. In 2016, the two most money-making export
products
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 were petroleum and engineered
goods
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 with an amount of 60
billion
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dollars
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 of earnings. The least valuable
products
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 were agricultural
goods
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 and textiles which earned approximately 30
billion
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dollars
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. Regarding the table, the only declining trend belongs to the gems and jewellery
by
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the
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 percentage of 5.18 decreasing in
value
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. The other
products
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 experienced an increase in their
value
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 and the most considerable surge was for the textiles which increased by 15.24 percent in
value
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, value, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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