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The graph shows the proportion of energy that was produced from coal in four European countries from 1995 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph shows the proportion of energy that was produced from coal in four European countries from 1995 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of
energy
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 produced by coal in Sweden, France,
Denmark
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 and Germany from 1995 to 2010.
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, the given trend of four different
european
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 countries
,
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 shows a decline in generating coal
energy
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 over the course of 15 years. On the one hand,
Denmark
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 and Germany used more than 55% of
energy
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 in 1995, which
than
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then
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 dropped around 40% by 1998. Whilst
Denmark
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 continued to decline
further
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 by 20% and
then
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stablized
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stabilized
stabilised
it's
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its
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 consumption from 2004 to 2007 and slowly dropped by 10% more until 2010. In contrary to
Denmark
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, Germany gradually decreased the utilization of coal
energy
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 from 2001 to 2007
upto
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up to
 15%.
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, it slumped
its
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in its
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 use and swiftly
raise
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rose
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 by 10% in the year 2010. France and Sweden
remained
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had
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relatively
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a relatively
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 slow and steady drop in
its
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their
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for
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from
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 1995 to 2010 over 30% to under 30%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, denmark with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • energy production
  • coal
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • policy changes
  • technological advancements
  • alternative energy sources
  • compare
  • contrast
  • similarities
  • differences
  • anomalies
  • outliers
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