Task1 You want to book a hotel that one of your friends recommended to you for a family holiday ar the seaside. Write a letter to the hotel manager to make arrangements.

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Dear Sir or Madam I hope
this
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letter will find you well and in good spirit. I
also
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expect that everything is going smoothly on your side. I am writing
this
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letter in order to make arrangements with you. I am going to take a holiday with my friends at the seaside. So I desire to reserve your hotel during the trip. I would like to emphasize
somethings
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some things
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that I require.
Firat
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First
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off
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of
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all, my accommodation option is a modern flat.
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,
this
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flat has to include
3rooms
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3 rooms
,
garage
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a garage
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, and
little
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a little
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gaerden
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garden
nearby it. I am visiting there next Monday and will remain
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for 5days
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5days
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5 days
. I
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would like to ask for some details about your hotel. I would be grateful if you
inform
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me about the price and what it will contain.
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Also
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Also,
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I would be interested to know about activities and places of interest. I hope that there are available many
intreguing
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interesting
and appealing places that can make my trip more exciting. I believe that you will take into consideration and accept my
pleads
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as if highly necessary for me. I would like to receive
itvas
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it as
it vas
soon as possible but not later than a week before
flight
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the flight
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. Yours faithfully Umurzoqova Z

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grammar
Consider revising grammar errors such as 'firat' instead of 'first' and 'itvas' instead of 'it as'. Pay attention to spelling and punctuation.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on one central idea. For example, the request for accommodation and the questions about hotel details could be better organized into separate paragraphs.
clarity
Instead of stating 'I desire to reserve your hotel during the trip', you could simply say 'I would like to reserve a room in your hotel for my stay'. This makes the request clearer and more polite.
content
You have included essential information such as the type of accommodation and duration of stay, which are important for your request.
tone
Your tone is polite and respectful, which is important in formal letter writing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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