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The charts below show the proportion of British students at one univercity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one univercity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
students
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 who studied
in
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at
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 the British
univerity
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university
 who knew to speak
in
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apply
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other
languages
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besides
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 English from 2000 to 2010.
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 are measured in percentages.
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, the majority of
students
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 could speak other
languages
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 in both years,
while
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students
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 who could not speak other
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language
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languages
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 was half of them. Moving to a more detailed analysis, Spanish was the most preferred
language
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 among
students
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 in 2000, at 20%. French made up 15%,
whereas
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 the figures for German and two other
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language
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 were responsible for the same level of speakers(10%) in 2000. The
learners
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number of learners
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 who did not know other
languages
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 were 30%.
On the other hand
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, in 2010, France, Spain and
German
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Germany
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 shared the same rate, with accounting for 10% each.
Students
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 who were able to speak
in
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another
language
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 and two other
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 were 20% and 15% respectively. the proportion of
students
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 who were not able to speak in other
languages
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 increased by 5% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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