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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests. You do NOT need to write any address.

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to get information if your
school
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 can accept my son's admission from April 2025. We have been living in Mississauga since my son was born. His name is Erin and he recently completed his grade 9 in Early Science
School
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.
Due to
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 some family
reasons
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reasons,
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 we are moving
in
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to
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the
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apply
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Burlington. We are going
stay
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to stay
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 in
this
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 city for
a long periods
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long periods
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 of time. My son
have
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very
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a very
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 strong
interests
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interest
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 in chemistry
as well as
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 he is
topper
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a topper
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 in his class. He started doing chemical projects when he was just 6 years old.
Through
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 his
school
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life
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life,
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 he
have
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 won numerous awards and competitions from
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school
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the school
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 side in Chemistry. 
Moreover
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, my friend recommended your
school
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 as your
school
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have
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has
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more
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a more
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 interesting future for students in Science. I am hoping to get approval
of
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for
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 his admission
in
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to
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 your
school
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till
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by
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 next week. Please let me know if you need more information, I am happy to share it with you. Looking forward to
hear
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hearing
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 back soon. Yours Faithfully, Sim

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task achievement
Consider adding more context or details about why you are moving or how it might affect your son's studies, which would strengthen your response.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the flow between ideas; for example, you could use linking phrases to connect your son's achievements to your recommendation of the school more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and use of tenses to ensure clarity—for example, 'periods' instead of 'periods of time' and 'is' instead of 'are' in phrases referring to your son.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your son's achievements and interests, which provides a good overview of his academic background.
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Your tone is polite and respectful, which is important when addressing the principal.
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