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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data demonstrates the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 from other countries
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who come
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come
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came
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 to work in these countries namely Australia, New
Zealand
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,
UK
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the UK
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, US in 2003 and 2006 and the
amount
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number
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 of migrants per 1,000
people
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 in
these nation
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this nation
these nations
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 in 2006.
overall
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, the four nations had
highest
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the highest
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number
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 of migrant
worker
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workers
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 in 2006 than 2003.
US
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The US
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 had more
people
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 from other nations for work in 2006 and it
also
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 followed the same pattern in 2003.
However
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, New
Zealand
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 always had the
less
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lowest
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number
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 of migrants in both 2003 and 2006. The
number
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 of helpers available
for
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in
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 New
Zealand
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 in 2006
with
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apply
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21.1(per 1,000
people
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) is significantly high in
comparision
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comparison
 with other countries. In terms of migrant
workers
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 US had always top in its
number
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 with 577,000 in 2003 and a slight increment with 678,000 in 2006.
Whereas
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, New
Zealand
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 is always at the bottom with 65,000 working
people
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 in 2003 and 87,000 in 2006 with an increment of 22,000 working
people
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.
UK
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The UK
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 had
more
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a higher
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number
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 of
workers
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 in
comparision
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comparison
to Australia in 2006 with a difference of 45,000
workers
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.
In contrast
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,
Austr̥alia
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Australia
 had increased
workers
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 rather than
UK
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the UK
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 in 2003(152,000 and 137,000 respectively). The least amount of
people
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are
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apply
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available for help in 2006 is for
US
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the US
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 with 2.3(per 1,000 
people
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).

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, zealand, number, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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