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The charts bellow show the proportions of british students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts bellow show the proportions of british students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of British
students
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 at a university in England who spoke additional
languages
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besides
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 English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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,
Spanish
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 was the most widely spoken foreign
language
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 in both years,
while
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 other
language
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 categories showed varying trends over time. In 2000,
students
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 who spoke
Spanish
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 made up the largest group, accounting for 30% of the total, followed closely by those who spoke only English. Meanwhile,
students
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 who spoke French and those who spoke other
languages
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 each constituted 15% of the student population. German
speakers
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 and
students
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 proficient in two additional
languages
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 made up 10% each. By 2010, the proportion of
Spanish
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speakers
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 increased by 5 percentage points to 35%,
while
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 the percentage of
students
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 who spoke another
language
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also
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 rose to 20%.
In contrast
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, the proportion of French
speakers
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 declined,
whereas
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 German
speakers
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 and
students
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 who spoke two additional
languages
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 remained unchanged at 10%. In summary,
Spanish
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 maintained its position as the most commonly spoken foreign
language
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,
while
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 other
languages
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 experienced slight fluctuations over the decade.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, spanish, language, speakers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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