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49.The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

49.The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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In
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 table, we can see five employment sectors,and each
one
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 has a salary
level
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 we will talk about each
one
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 and what is the best The first
level
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 which is the high
school
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diploma
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 as expected is the lowest
one
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 out of them all with around 30,000
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 is because a high
school
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diploma
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 gets the least amount of education out of the 4.Jumping a little high up is the second
level
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 which is the bachelor's
degree
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 approximately 40,000 so around 10,000 more than the high
school
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diploma
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.Bachelor's degrees get more than a high
school
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 because they study more and get a longer education and most importantly, they have a university
degree
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 which is stronger than a high
school
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one
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.Moving on to the third
level
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 the highest paying degrees are the master's
degree
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 and the PhD.Starting with a master's where they earn about 50,000 which is around 10,000 more than a bachelor's
degree
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 and around 20,000 more than a high
school
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diploma
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,
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,the PhD which is around the same as the master's
degree
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 is approximately 50,000

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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