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There was an advert inviting applications for a certain job in the local newspaper. Write to Human Resource Department. In your letter, describe the job you are applying for and your relevant work experience. In your letter • say about the job position you are applying for • describe your experience • describe how your current job and the one you are applying for is a good match

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Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well I
am
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sharn
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shared
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 and doing a
teacher
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job
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 in
Asian
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an Asian
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 school for
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last
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the last
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 five years and I had a
two year
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 experience
in
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 Ford Public
school
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School
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. Almost one month ago, I saw an advertisement
of
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for
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 certain jobs in the local newspaper. Where I applied for the clerk
position
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 at RBC
bank
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at
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in
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Cananda
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Canada
. There are two positions open for the same
position
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. I mentioned
about
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apply
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my past experience and current
job
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 in my resume and applied online for that
position
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. I applied for clerk because
i
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I
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compete
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complete
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 all the
job
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 requirements I
having
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have
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 more than 4
year
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years
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experience
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of experience
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, excel
expertice
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expertise
experience
, long hours sitting capacity, punctuality,
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and full-time
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availabilty
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availability
. All these are the basic requirements of the
job
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position
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. The reason
to switch
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for switching
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 from
teacher
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a teacher
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 to
clerical
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a clerical
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job
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that
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 my husband
also
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having
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 the same
job
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proffeshion
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profession
 and I have an dream to work in
clerical
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a clerical
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 line I often
applied
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apply
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 for
this
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job
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 but sometime my
job
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 requirement not matched
with
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the applicants. I request you please check my application number 4566332 and tell me about my status I am eagerly waiting for your positive response. Yours Sincerely,
Sharn
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Share
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coherence and cohesion
The letter generally addresses the task requirements, but it would be beneficial to ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus. For instance, you could separate your work experience into a dedicated paragraph to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for grammatical errors and typos, such as 'excel expertice' (expertise) and 'profeshion' (profession). This attention to detail can significantly improve the overall impression of your writing.
task achievement
The letter includes all required components: the job position, relevant experience, and a reason for applying, which shows a good understanding of the task.
coherence and cohesion
You have expressed eagerness in your closing remarks, which adds a positive tone to the letter, showcasing your enthusiasm for the job.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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