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The best way to reduce traffic congestion is to provide a free public transport service. To what extent do you agree or disagree?. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

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In today´s world, rapid increase in traffic is a major problem in almost every nation . Majors should be taken to reduce it . And I totally agree with the idea of making
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public transportation free of cost. There is
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 of car buyers and in almost every household there is a car
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 every individual . Just the number of cars
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 the road
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turn
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 a
five minute
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 ride into
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twenty
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 minutes . If the people are given
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 accessible service, like making a reasonable or free fare
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 to some extent . When I was doing my Bachelor´s in Germany I could really see the proactive benefits of public
transport
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 . Specially , for students the
transport
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 was free of cost . That
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 almost all undergraduates to utilize
convenient
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 bus or tram . That way , there
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 so many cars in the way . I almost
reach
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university
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 in just ten minutes and there used to be hardly any trouble
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 congested traffic .
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Also
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 I feel like people using public
transport
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 are
more happy
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 as they can absorb everyone around more
peace
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. In conclusion , I could only see the positive aspects
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 use of public
transport
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 . If every nation
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 it
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 it will bring a lot of positive change .

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task achievement
Try to enhance the clarity and specificity of your main ideas. A more detailed explanation of how free public transport directly correlates to reduced traffic congestion would strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Consider improving the flow between ideas in your paragraphs. Using linking words and phrases could enhance connections between your points, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for grammatical issues and typos. Phrasing like 'major problem' instead of 'majors problem' and 'there is incline of car buyers' could be improved for clarity and grammatical accuracy.
task achievement
You provided a personal experience that effectively illustrated the benefits of public transport, which adds authenticity to your argument.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly states your opinion, setting the stage for the rest of the essay, which is a strong aspect of your writing.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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