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Band 3.5

You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter explain why you want to leave your current job describe what kind of job you are looking for ask for some help or advice

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Dear Mr or Madam,
Im
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I'm
 writing a request to
tirmenate
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terminate
 my contract as soon as possible because
,
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apply
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I have a
decint
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decent
 offer from
'PWC'
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the 'PWC'
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 company and I would
very
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gratful
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grateful
 if you
accept
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 it directly .
However
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,
Many
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 reasons
makes
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 me
exaited
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excited
for
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about
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 the new position like
firstly
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, The offers contain a higher salary than my current job .
Secondly
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, It has a health
insurence
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insurance
 within class A .
Thirdly
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 ,The
headquarter
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 branch is only five
minuts
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minutes
 from my hometown.
finally
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 ,
Im
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I'm
not
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no
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 longer comfortable in
this
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 job because
unfortuablty
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unfortunately
 some of my
colleges
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 are
distrpting
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disrupting
disturbing
distracting
 me . Despite
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, I
am
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really hope that you will understand and consider my request.
In addition
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 ,I would like to
recive
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receive
 a good
behavior
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behaviour
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 certificate and
also
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an experinces
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experinces
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experience
 certificate .

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greeting and closing
Your letter should include a proper greeting and closing. Starting with 'Dear' is great, but avoid 'Mr or Madam' and try something personal like 'Dear [Friend's Name]'. Don't forget to sign off at the end.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that you maintain a single idea per paragraph. For instance, keep reasons for leaving your job in one paragraph and your request for assistance in another.
complete response
Try to avoid spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'tirmenate' and 'exaited'. Proofreading your letter would help improve clarity.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your reasons for leaving and the kind of job you are looking for, which is a good start for task achievement.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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