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Production levels of the main fuels in the UK between 1981 and 2000

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The line graph illustrates the
production
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 levels of three major fuels—petroleum, coal, and natural gas—in the UK over a period of 19 years, from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, the
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 of petroleum remained the highest throughout the period, showing a generally upward trend.
In contrast
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, coal
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 experienced a significant decline,
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 natural gas
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 steadily increased. In 1981, both petroleum and coal started at around 85 and 80
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 respectively,
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 natural gas was much lower at approximately 35
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. Petroleum
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 rose sharply, peaking at about 140
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 in the late 1980s, and remained consistently high, ending close to 150
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 by 2000. Coal
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,
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, dropped significantly in the mid-1980s, recovered briefly, but
then
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 declined steadily, finishing below 40
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. Natural gas
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 grew gradually and consistently over the years, reaching its highest level of around 100
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 by the end of the period.

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Task Achievement
Consider providing more data to support your points, especially in relation to the trends in coal and natural gas production.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance the connections between your ideas to further improve coherence, especially when moving from one fuel type to another.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall overview of the trends in fuel production is clear and well-articulated.
Task Achievement
The use of specific figures adds credibility and clarity to your statements.

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