IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph provides information about the
consumption
Use synonyms
 of fuel
energy
Use synonyms
 in the U.S. between 1980 and 2023, measured in
quadrillion
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
. In general, petrol oil was the highest
user
Correct your spelling
use
show examples
 throughout the period.
However
Linking Words
,
hydropwer
Correct your spelling
hydropower
hydro power
 was the minor
consumption
Use synonyms
 among citizens in the US. Turning to the line chart, petrol and oil used only 35
quadrillion
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 in the beginning
year
Use synonyms
 before experiencing a significant
increased
Replace the word
increase
show examples
, with
apredicted
Correct your spelling
a predicted
predicted
 a peak at 50
quadrillion
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 in
Use synonyms
year
Change the article
the year
show examples
 2030. The
user
Correct your spelling
use
show examples
 of coal was nearly the same as natural gas just under 30
quadrillion
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 during the
year
Use synonyms
. It can be clearly seen that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 the minor
consumption
Use synonyms
 of
energy
Use synonyms
 was nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower.
These
Change the determiner
This energy
These energies
show examples
energy
Use synonyms
 started at the same level at about 4
quadrillion
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
 and witnessed a slight rise to 10
quadrillion
Use synonyms
units
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, the utilization of hydropower exhibited
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
minor
consumption
Use synonyms
 compared to other fuel
energy
Use synonyms
 during the specified
year
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
▼
Linking words: Add more linking words.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, energy, quadrillion, units, year with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
What to do next:
Look at other essays: