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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps illustrate the current plan
of
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 the
sports
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centre
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 in a university
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 and the way it will change when renovated in the future. At first glance, the new
sports
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centre
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 will significantly look more spacious and equipped with more facilities. The outdoor courts will give their places to special state-to-the-art salons for more types of
sports
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 making the
centre
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 bigger, approximately in excess to double. On the southern side,
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 the
entrence
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entrance
 will maintain
at
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 the same place, the
entrence
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entrance
 salon will become more spacious and the right and left
corner
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 will be replaced by a new cafe and a modern
sports
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 shop respectively. In the west, the western outdoor courts will have been demolished and replaced by a big leisure pool
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 changing rooms. In the east, the outdoor courts will be replaced by a
sports
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 hall, and two modern dance studios will be constructed on the eastern corner
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 to a new changing room which will be built on the southeast corner. The
centre
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 of the map will almost stay the same with a
twentyfive-metre
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twenty five-metre
twenty-five-metre
 pool at the
centre
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surrounding
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 by
seating
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a seating
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 area in the east and
changing
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a changing
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 room in the west.
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, the northern gym will be expanded to the eastern side finding a way through
new
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the new
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sports
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 hall and dance studios.

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Ensure to clearly compare and contrast the current layout and the proposed changes, this will enhance your analysis.
coherence and cohesion
Work on improving the overall structure of your essay to make it easier for the reader to follow your points, such as clearer paragraphing.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied vocabulary and complex sentence structures, which can help to elevate the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
The essay effectively conveys the main changes and improvements to the sports centre layout.
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There is a good amount of detail included regarding specific facilities and their locations which adds to the overall understanding.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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