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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main fuction of a university?

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Nowadays many
people
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 believe that colleges should provide their students with the
knowledge
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 and skills needed in the workplace.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 think that the essential duty of a college should be giving
an
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access to
knowledge
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 for its own sake, regardless of whether the
couse
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course
cause
 is useful to an employer. In my perspective, the foremost functions of a
university
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 are making
competent
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a competent
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 workforce and enhancing
education
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the education
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 world. First and foremost,
competent
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a competent
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 workforce
are
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 needed in every
countries
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country
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. A good
university
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 has to
produced
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produce
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 those
people
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 who can adapt well in their workplaces.
Knowledge
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 and skills are not the only factors to be a reliable worker, but
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 attitudes,
such
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 as willingness to learn new
skill
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skills
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, being adaptive, ability to work in a team, etc.
For instance
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, if you are capable with
your
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knowledge
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 that you studied
from
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an
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university
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, but your teamwork
skill
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skills
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is
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are
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 really bad, it will
give
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impact
with
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your job.
People
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 will neglect you because you can't work with them.
Therefore
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, a good
university
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 should consider
about
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this
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 circumstance.
Moreover
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,
an
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university
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 has
duty
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a duty
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 to do educational advancement through
research
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 and innovation. In
this
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technology
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technological
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 era, it is easier to attain information that could be bad information for society.
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University
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The university
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 should make a movement to prevent
this
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 condition. They have to do
research
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 to overcome any bad news that
happened
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happens
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. As an example, in a covid disease moment, there was
an information
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information
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 about
solution
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a solution
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 to
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drink
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herbal
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the herbal
a herbal
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drink
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drinks
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, at that time,
an
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university
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 was
do
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research
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 to make sure
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whether that
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that
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the
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drink
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 was really helpful or not. It was
delight
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 that one of
universities
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the universities
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 in the UK did the
research
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, since
finally
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 that herbal
drink
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 didn't help to cure the covid.
To sum up
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, I think
an
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university
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 should be a place that can share
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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, skills, and attitudes.
Furthermore
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,
an
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university
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 should be a place to do some
researches
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research
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 and innovations to make the world a better place.

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task achievement
Clarify your thesis statement at the end of the introduction for improved focus. You may want to state more explicitly that you believe both the workplace skills and access to knowledge should be regarded.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your points are well-organized and linked effectively. You might benefit from using clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to vocabulary accuracy; for instance, use 'providing access' instead of 'giving an access.' This small adjustment can enhance clarity.
task achievement
You present a balanced view of the university's role and provide good reasoning for your perspective.
task achievement
Your examples, like the COVID-19 herbal drink research, illustrate your points well and show a real-world connection.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employability
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • intellectual curiosity
  • well-rounded individual
  • curriculum
  • adaptability
  • lifelong learning
  • research initiatives
  • societal challenges
  • innovation
  • workforce readiness
  • specialized programs
  • general education
  • career preparedness
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