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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverity in Australia in 1999.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverity in Australia in 1999.
The table demonstrates the percentage of
variety
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a variety
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types
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of types
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 of families living in deprivation in Australia in 1999. As it seems from the table proportion of Australian dissimilar living categories people changes from 4% to 21% during the year
mantioned
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mentioned
 above.
Minimum
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The minimum
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 poverty percentage
belong
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belongs
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 to aged couples
in contrast
Linking Words
 the highest poverty percentage
belong
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belongs
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 to sole parents.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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