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People think that university students should be able to study whatever they like. Others believe that universities should only teach subjects that will be useful in the future, such as science, technology and engineering. Discuss these views and give your opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that degrees play a crucial role in the determination of jobs.
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, some argue that
students
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 should have the ability to choose any
subjects
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 they want to study,
while
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 others believe that
universities
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 should teach only useful
subjects
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,
such
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 as technology and science, which will be useful in the future. I believe that
universities
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 must teach
subjects
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 that agree with development. On the one hand, some people say
students
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 should be allowed to study whatever
subjects
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 they like.
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,
this
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 theory has a positive side because it will encourage learners to do well during the period of study.
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, allowing
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 to build their own plans will make them rely on themselves, which will
also
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 create a feeling of responsibility.
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, if
students
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 establish their plans, they will choose the road that agrees with their dream jobs.
On the other hand
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, others argue that
universities
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 should teach only useful
subjects
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.
In other words
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,
universities
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 must teach only
subjects
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 that are appropriate for the future, so
universities
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 commit to providing an education suited to job requirements.
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, researchers show that graduates with arts degrees are the most unemployed.
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, I agree with
this
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 side because
universities
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 must guide
students
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 to the right route. In conclusion, despite some believing that
students
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 should make their own plans to be responsible and
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avoid blaming others, I believe that
universities
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 should create a consistent syllabus that teaches only useful
subjects
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 like science and technology.

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task achievement
Ensure to elaborate on your main points more fully, providing clearer reasoning and stronger examples to support your claims.
coherence cohesion
Consider improving the flow of your essay by using more transitional phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs effectively.
task achievement
You provided a clear introduction that outlined the two opposing views on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarized your opinion, reinforcing your position on the matter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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