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Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. ag

Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. ag
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the pie charts depict the
percentage
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 of various types of
trasportation
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transportation
 (walking, bus, bicycle, car, and train) for
people
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 going to one university to work or study in the UK in two
years
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 (2004 and 2009).
Overall
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, cars had the highest proportion of transportation used by
people
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 in 2004.
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, buses took
the
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first place in 2009 as the most used method. trains were the least used in both
years
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. In 2004, the type with the highest
percentage
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 was cars, accounting for 51%.
In addition
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, buses came
second,
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with a
percentage
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 of 33%.
However
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,
this
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last
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 category's proportion increased after 5
years
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 to 46% and took the first place
instead
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 of cars,
who
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which
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 decreased to 28% of users.
Furthermore
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, 9% of
people
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 travelling to one university either for work or studying went by
bicycles
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bicycle
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 in the first year,
whereas
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this
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 number grew by almost
the
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double in the second year, accounting for 16%.
Additionally
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, both trains and walking methods had the lowest
percentage
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 in comparison to the other categories in the two
years
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. the number of persons using trains climbed
with
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 only 1% in the five given
years
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.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 walking to the university rose from 4% to 6%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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