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The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The information presented in the chart gives us an insight into the total
sales
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 of
a
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drug companies over
five-year
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the five-year
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 period
2002
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between 2002
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 and 2006.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
sales
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 in America
has
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had
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 a great start in the initial years
while
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 Asia ended up with large
sales
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. In detail, the drugs purchased by America was 41% in 2002
then
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 had a minimal decrease over the period with 30% in 2006 ,
while
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 Europe had a gradual rise in 2002 with 34% till 2004 with 38%
then
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 had a slight decrement to 30% in 2006.
However
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,
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initially
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initially,
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 Asia had
least
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the least
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sales
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 in 2002 with 25% but there was a
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noticeable
noticable
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noticeable
 increase and reached
to
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apply
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40% in 2006

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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