Some people think that old houses should be knocked down to build new houses or apartment blocks. Others think that old houses should be protected because they are part of a nation’s history. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Building new cities has become a concern in modern communities.
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people believe that it is better to replace aged Correct your spelling
Many
houses
with developed ones and condos that Use synonyms
has
Change the verb form
have
capacity
for more population. Correct article usage
the capacity
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While others
stress the importance of taking care of those historical Correct word choice
Others
houses
as they Use synonyms
are reflecting
social identities. In Wrong verb form
reflect
this
essay, I will explain why I disagree with destroying the old Linking Words
houses
with new ones.
One key reason for saving the old homes is that they are the Use synonyms
immage
of Correct your spelling
image
peoples
culture. Young generations should know how their ancestors used to live. Change noun form
people's
For example
, in Amman, the capital of Jordan, there are many historical buildings that illustrate how Jordanians used to live and protect themselves during different eras. My kids would love to visit Linking Words
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site not only for its astonishing architecture but Linking Words
also
for the heritage stories it tells. Those places should be marked as protected places and stop the Linking Words
accomodating
new population there.
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accommodating
Also
, the number of citizens living in one place will have a serious negative impact on the environment. As more individuals will be Linking Words
competeing
for limited natural Correct your spelling
competing
resourses
in one area. Correct your spelling
resources
For instance
, the government of Jordan has decided to stop new construction in some cities like Irdid. Linking Words
This
is Linking Words
due to
the noticed demand Linking Words
on
water resources, which caused less quality of service provided for people.
In conclusion, Old Change preposition
for
houses
should not be damaged to build developed cities and Use synonyms
accomodate
people. Protecting the culture and the natural resources should be considered by governments and individuals.Correct your spelling
accommodate
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language
Consider rephrasing 'aged houses' as 'old houses' for clarity and consistency.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and stick to it throughout the paragraph.
task achievement
Provide a stronger and more direct thesis statement in the introduction that clearly outlines your position.
task achievement
Avoid making broad statements without adequate support. For instance, provide more details on the environmental impact of overpopulation.
argumentation
The essay presents a clear opinion on the issue, showing your stance against demolishing old houses.
examples
You include specific examples from Jordan, which help to illustrate your points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite