You are organising a surprise party for a friend and want to book a venue for this event. Write a letter to the manager of the venue. - explain the purpose of the party; - suggest the date and time; - inquire about services and facilities available.

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Dear manager, My name is Robbie and I hope
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letter finds you well! I am writing
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to make a reservation at your esteemed restaurant for a party of 20 next week. The main reason for making
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booking is to celebrate my best friend
Ben
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30th birthday. Knowing him for more than 10 years, I intend to shower him with a
suprise
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surprise
party at his favourite restaurant. To make his wish come true, I wonder if you can secure a private dining room
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Friday night next week, approximately around 7 pm. In
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to
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the detail
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detail
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of
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event, I sincerely appreciate
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the restaurant
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arrange several birthday ornaments decorated across the room. I would
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like to order a
signiture
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signature
Cantonese dish from your menu in advance, as Ben has been craving for the delicious Peking Duck recently.
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, I wonder if there
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any other complementary services available, like a birthday song performance
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. Let me know if there
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any
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information needed from me, and I look forward to hearing from you. Warm regards, Robbie

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task achievement
Consider adding a more explicit request for confirmation of the booking in your closing paragraph to enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. For example, the second paragraph mixes the purpose and the details; separating them could improve clarity.
tone
Your polite greeting and closing create a friendly tone, which is important for this kind of letter.
task achievement
You've clearly expressed the purpose of the letter, which helps the reader understand your intentions right away.
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