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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of Australian
exports
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 to four different countries including
Japan
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, the US,
China
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 and India from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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,
exports
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 to
China
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 increased significantly over the period, overtaking all other countries by 2012
while
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exports
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 to
Japan
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 declined steadily. The US and India showed fluctuations with relatively lower figures. In 1990,
Japan
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 was the leading destination for Australian
exports
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 at about 27%, but
this
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 figure steadily dropped to around 18% by 2012.
In contrast
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,
exports
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 to
China
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 began at just over 2% and rose dramatically, surpassing
Japan
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 around 2007 and reaching nearly 30% in 2012. The US which started with a moderate share of around 11% experienced a slight dip in the mid-1990s
along with
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 a brief rise around 2000 and
then
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 a decline to just over 5% in 2012. Indian
exports
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 began below 2% but showed gradual growth, peaking near 8% in 2010 before a slight drop
at the end
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. In summary,
China
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 became Australia's dominant export market by 2012
while
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Japan
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, the US, and India saw either declining or modest trends.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, japan, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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