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The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the percentage of individuals in 5 age
groups
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 who worked in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020.
Overall
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, in 2015, almost all
groups
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 accounted for similar percentages at around 20% with the exception of the under-21-
years
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-old group.
However
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, the trend in 2020 shifted. Workers who are 21 to 30
years
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 old and 41 to 50
years
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 old became the majority. In 2025, there were 23% of employees
who
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apply
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aged between 21 to 30. The number of
this
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 group increased dramatically, contributing 33% in 2020.
Similarly
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, the number of 41-to-50-
years
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-old employees stood at 19% in 2015, its percentage saw noticeable growth, reaching 28% in the later year. Those numbers surpassed other numbers of the remaining
groups
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. The figures for people
who
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apply
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aged 31 to 40 and who were older than 50
years
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 old experienced dramatic declines, dropping from 21% to 11% and 23% to 16% respectively.
While
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 these
groups
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 were the two most common
groups
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 in 2015, they became less employed.
In contrast
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, there were only 14% of workers were under 21
years
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,
this
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 number remained almost steady, falling only 2% to 12% in the final year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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