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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing the letter for requesting to you
for
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transfering
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transfer
 my job
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head
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 office of our company in India for 6 months. I have been working in our international company
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 a decade. It is a great opportunity for me to
work
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head quarter
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 because veteran workers are there . I can acquire knowledge from them that can help me to ameliorate my skills.
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are
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 a wide range of tools and resources available and
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 can become familiar with them. I will handle my
work
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 by myself. Our company offers remote
work
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 to many employees. I will complete my
work
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 from India with the help of
convinenet
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convenient
internet
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. I am requesting you to help me
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arragements
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arrangements
. Can you help me to transfer my job from Canada to Toronto
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 I am looking forward
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 your positive consideration. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure the letter is formatted correctly, with a proper introduction and a closing. Consider using paragraphs for each main point to improve clarity.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific reasons for your desire to work at the head office, linking them to benefits for both yourself and the company.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure spelling and grammar are accurate as they contribute to the overall impression of your letter.
task achievement
You express a clear desire to develop professionally by working in the head office, which is a strong point.
task achievement
The letter has a polite tone and closes with a positive request for consideration, which is important in formal communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • global operations
  • cross-functional
  • remote work
  • progress updates
  • logistical arrangements
  • cultural exchange
  • continuity plan
  • enhance my skillset
  • broaden my horizons
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