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The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom.

The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in the United Kingdom.
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The line graph provides information with data about the median per day of temperature in four different
cities
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 worldwide. The average
are
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 measured by
Celsius
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.
overall
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, it is evident from the graph that the
maximmum
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maximum
 temperatures had reversed
trend
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the trend
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 of
two
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the two
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cantries
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countries
,in
the
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other
word
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, Auckland and Christchurch in
the
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New Zealand had
highest
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the highest
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 temperatures.
In contrast
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, two
cities
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 in the United Kingdom.
To begin
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 with a detailed analysis , Auckland and Christchurch had the same direction with
slightly different
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,
for example
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, Auckland was just under 25
degrees
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celsius
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Celsius
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 and
then
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ther
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there
 was a gradual decrease to 15
degrees
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 (
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celsius
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Celsius
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) .
While
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 ,
average
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the average
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 daily maximum temperature in
the
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Christchurch went down by
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further
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a further
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 14 , from 24
degrees
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 (
celsius
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) at the beginning of
year
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the year
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 to almost 10
degrees
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 (
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celsius
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Celsius
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) in July. Followed by
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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 dramatically in both
cities
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 to
reaching
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reach
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 a peak
21
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of 21
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 ,
20
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and 20
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degrees
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Celsius
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 respectively
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 shown.
On the other hand
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 , London and Edinburgh in the United Kingdom
also
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 have
lowest
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the lowest
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 temperatures
than
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of
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 any
the
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of the
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cities
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 in New Zealand .
Nonetheless
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, they have the same trend , which
initially
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 both of them started
approximately
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at approximately
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 5
degrees
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then
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 increased significantly to reach 21
degrees
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 for London and nearly 17
degrees
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 for Edinburgh , before once again dropping to the same point od the beginning in December .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, celsius, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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