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Band 4.5

You are going to travel abroad for two months and while you are away a friend would like to live in your apartment. Write to the owner of the apartment explaining the situation. In your letter: explain that you are going to travel abroad, describe your friend and say why he/she would be a good tenant, ask whether the owner will agree to this.

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Dear Sir, I hope you are great, The purpose of writing
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 letter is to inform you that from next week
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 am going
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back home for two months. The reason behind
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 my father is sick so
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 have to take care of him for
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 weeks. As my room will be vacant at that time. There is one
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friend
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 who got
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 job near to my apartment for two months. As
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 am thinking
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 my room to him for some time as it will help me
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financially
. If
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will
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talk about my friend he is
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 guy from
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 background. He
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doesn't
 even smoke or drink.
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 positive point about him
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 he is
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 boy who
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 money and
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 bills on time. I just want to take
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permission from your side. I hope you will yes in return and it will help me in different ways. I am waiting for your reply. Thanks and regards. Your
faithfuly
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faithfully
faithful
, Sharanpreet Singh

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grammatical accuracy
Make sure to use proper punctuation and capitalization throughout your letter, especially at the beginning of sentences and for names.
coherence
Consider organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, focusing on a single main idea per paragraph to improve readability.
tone
Make your request more polite by stating something like, 'I would greatly appreciate your consideration of this request.'
task achievement
Overall, your letter addresses the main points, including your travel plans and a description of your friend.
tone
Your letter conveys a friendly tone, which is appropriate for communicating with your landlord.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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