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The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000.(Anelya1)

The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000.(Anelya1)
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The given bar chart represents the average number of manufactured products
by
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Asia
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,
Europe
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 and other parts of the world between the years 1840 and 2000.
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, the figure
of
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 continents
as
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Asia
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,
Europe
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 and
also
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rest
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the rest
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 of the world fluctuated over the given time period.
In addition
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,
Europe
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 has produced a
large
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larger
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 number of goods than other countries for the same time record. In 1840,
Asia
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 manufactured by far the highest percentage of production, peaking at 50%, but it
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 dropped substantially to 20% in 1920 and reached the point
at
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 40%
in
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 the end of
graphic
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. Meanwhile, the percentage of manufacturing
by
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Europe
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, which was less
to
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 10% than
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Asia
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in Asia
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, went up significantly and
get
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reached
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the
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 peak at 50% in 1920, but
then
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 reduced gradually to the lowest level
as
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 25% in 2000.
However
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,
Europe
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 manufactured a good amount of stocks.
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, the statistics of other parts of the world illustrated a marginal increase from 10% to 35% in 1960, but it dramatic decline
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this
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moderately
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 jump and reached
at
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over 30% in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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