The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

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The bar charts compare the percentages of men and

women

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aged 60 to 64 in

employment

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across four countries in 1970 and 2000.

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, male

employment

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rates dropped significantly in all countries

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female

employment

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rates showed smaller changes. In 1970,

employment

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among men was highest in Japan and Belgium at 84% and 79% respectively. By 2000, all countries experienced a decline. Belgium had the steepest drop to only 19%. Japan remained the highest at 76%

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Australia and the USA fell to 47% and 55%. For

women

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aged 60 to 64,

employment

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levels were generally much lower in both years. In 1970, the USA and Japan had the highest rates at around 36% and 43%. These declined slightly by 2000. Belgium consistently had the lowest female

employment

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with only 7% in 2000. The changes for

women

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were relatively small compared to men which suggests older

women

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remained underrepresented in the workforce during both periods.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.

Some children spent more hours on smartphones. Why is this case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In some countries fees by paid by themselves but in some it is paid by themselves

In recent years, more and more people tend to live individually. What are the causes of this trend? Does this have a positive or negative effect on society?

1.Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to solve this problem? Please study the example and write your own essay. You can use information from the example, but in case you do, make sure to rework it.

In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports. What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?