Nowadays,children watch a lot of TV and play video games.However ,some think that these activities are not beneficial for a child's mental health.

Nowadays it is argued that a huge part of
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spend more time on television and play online
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.
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, parents think that these activities have show bad influence on a child's brain health.
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will suggest some relevant examples in the upcoming paragraphs.
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in video
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,can become immune to violence and more inclined to act violently themselves.
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spending too much time playing video
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can isolate
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. One argument supporting
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statement is that it is not a secret most movies and computer
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in which
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with great passion perform a lot of scenes of violence.
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to say after watching or playing
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films and
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children
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as teenagers think that violence is a normal situation and apply cruelty
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dealing with these groupmates,family members and other people. Another main argument is that
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are spending a lot of time playing video
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and others.
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can result in
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's social skills not developing well especially in making friends and communicating with others. These days many young people prefer to stay alone
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of joining community service. There are a lot of obvious examples
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. Take my cousin as an example now he is 15 years old. He
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fan of
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mobile. He plays it around 6 or 8 hours every day
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why he can not imagine your life without pubg.
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, he
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not have any friends. In conclusion,
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firmly believe that playing too many
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isolates
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because of the reasons discussed above
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some people think differently,the evidence and arguments support my point of view.

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language
Make sure to use correct subject-verb agreements (e.g., 'children spend' instead of 'children spend more').
structure
Provide clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance the logical flow of arguments.
language
Avoid using informal phrases and contractions in academic writing (e.g., 'that's why' should be 'therefore').
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Use a wider range of vocabulary and varied sentence structures to enhance the sophistication of your writing.
content
The essay presents a clear stance on the topic, agreeing with the statement about the negative effects of TV and video games on children.
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The examples provided, such as the cousin's experience with PUBG, are relevant and add a personal touch to the argument.

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