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(2024) You have just spent a weekend staying at a Hotel in London. When you get home you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. Write to the hotel manager. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the bag and its content that you left there explain what you want the manager to do about it

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I am the occupant who stayed in
room
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 40s during the
last
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 weekend. I am writing to inform you that I left my luggage at the hotel. My family and I decided to spend the long weekend including Good Friday in London. A
room
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 was booked by us at your hotel on Monday. We got allotted to
room
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 number
40s
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40
. Unfortunately, I left a big blue luggage in the
room
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while
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 we were leaving.
Although
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 it did not
had
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have
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 any expensive items, it contained all the chocolates that I bought for my friends. We did not realize that until we
reach
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reached
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 our home. I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
can
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could
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 send the bag to the airport. They will make an arrangement to send it on forward to the lost and found department. Yours sincerely, Jojo

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure you use more formal language and structure your letter with clear paragraphs based on the content you want to convey.
task achievement
Add more details about the bag itself, such as its size or any distinctive features, to help the manager identify it more easily.
positive
The introduction and closing are appropriately composed for a letter to a hotel manager.
positive
You clearly state the issue and what you would like the hotel manager to do, which is essential for task completion.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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