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Band 4.5

You have recently had dinner at an expensive restaurant and you were not satisfied with the food or service. You have decided to write a letter to the manager to complain about: •the table you were seated at •the long delays and unavailability of some items •the lack of concern by staff members regarding your problems

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Dear Manager, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction related to my
last
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 visit
at
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to
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 your restaurant when I came with my family to enjoy dinner. I have been a long-
time
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 guest
with
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of
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 your restaurant and often
came
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come
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 here with my friends and relatives. But,
This
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time
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 I am not at all happy with the service I got.The table was already occupied by someone which I reserved for myself by calling you in advance. After that, Waiter gave us
table
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a table
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 at the corner and it was not even cleaned properly. At the
time
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 of ordering
food
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, We ordered
some
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a
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 variety of breads and starters and I noticed that the worker was not at all polite and familiar with us which
makes
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made
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 me feel weird at that
time
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 because usually when we came to enjoy
food
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 the staff members treated us like family.
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, The staff was taking more
time
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 than expected for
food
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 and some items we ordered
was
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were
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 not available at that
time
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. When I asked about the alternatives for the
food
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 items not available at that
time
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to
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apply
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staff ,
Instead
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 of telling
the
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us the
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 possible dishes
they
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apply
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told us to check the menu and order any other items, Which shows no
efforts
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effort
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 from them to provide good customer service to us. I am looking forward to hearing from you and requesting you to provide us
refund
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a refund
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 for the inconvenience we got on the other day. Yours
sincerly
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sincerely
, Raghav Sharma.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly. For example, discuss each point of complaint in a separate paragraph.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone and avoid conversational phrases. For example, instead of 'makes me feel weird,' you might say, 'I found it disconcerting.'
task achievement
You expressed your concerns clearly and provided specific examples from your experience, which is important for a complaint letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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